Funny Child Poems : Paintball

Paintball

(31 votes, average: 4.29 out of 5)

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I feel the shots taken
all the paint wasted
all the money spent
the dodging continues
you see people get hit.

The bruises and bumps you get
when the paint splatters
nothing really matters
you feel trapped
whats going through your head?

you see snipers with scopes
are you gonna get hit
might as well go prone
duck in the snake pits
but you get hit in the leg

its only you alone
verse 6 guys
what do you do?
you just sit and watch until they come
what do you know, you shoot a guy..

This is my first poem so please dont make fun of me im only 11
by Brandon Jakob

cj, Said:

nice
Jackie, Said:

fOR ONLY 11 THATS IS REALLY GOOD GREAT JOB bRADON nO WON SHOULD MAKE FUN OF YOU
austin, Said:

haha dumb
Logan, Said:

great poem! if u want a place to work on look at the part where it say7s u get shot in the leg….it doesnt flow with the whole thing…so if u change that than it will b fantastic
someone you dont know, Said:

haha the end is perty funny. it just like “what do you know, you shoot a guy” haha
brandi, Said:

cool poem !
Mary, Said:

omg thats really good fabulous job!!!!!!!!!!!1
kelsey, Said:

nice for 11 thats pretty darn good !
Miles, Said:

Hey man great poem! I’m into paintball and the poem describes really what it is all about. Great job!!!!!
allie, Said:

i love the poem and showed it to my english teacher and he even used it as a lesson in class one day… great job brandon!!!!
Micheal Jackson, Said:

Nice, if you are a boy can you come to my house at 10 p.m.