Paintball
I feel the shots taken
all the paint wasted
all the money spent
the dodging continues
you see people get hit.
The bruises and bumps you get
when the paint splatters
nothing really matters
you feel trapped
whats going through your head?
you see snipers with scopes
are you gonna get hit
might as well go prone
duck in the snake pits
but you get hit in the leg
its only you alone
verse 6 guys
what do you do?
you just sit and watch until they come
what do you know, you shoot a guy..
This is my first poem so please dont make fun of me im only 11
by Brandon Jakob
Filed under: Funny Child Poems
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(69 votes, average: 4.17 out of 5)
nice
fOR ONLY 11 THATS IS REALLY GOOD GREAT JOB bRADON nO WON SHOULD MAKE FUN OF YOU
haha dumb
great poem! if u want a place to work on look at the part where it say7s u get shot in the leg….it doesnt flow with the whole thing…so if u change that than it will b fantastic
haha the end is perty funny. it just like “what do you know, you shoot a guy” haha
cool poem !
omg thats really good fabulous job!!!!!!!!!!!1
nice for 11 thats pretty darn good !
Hey man great poem! I’m into paintball and the poem describes really what it is all about. Great job!!!!!
i love the poem and showed it to my english teacher and he even used it as a lesson in class one day… great job brandon!!!!
Nice, if you are a boy can you come to my house at 10 p.m.
cool poem keep it up
Nice thats better than me and im 16
nice job you did really good for a 11 year old
aww thats like so cute haha lmao lol dang
austin stop being mean! NICE POEM KEEP IT UP!!!!
good poems
thats really good great job
Awesome Job
I hope its ok i am going to use your poem in my english project.
its really funny that your name is brandon and u wrote about paintball
my cuzins name is brandon and hes the only person i ever paintball with!!! ur poem was really cute and embodied the essence of paintball beautifully!!!!
dont listen to austin becuse that is a cool poem keep going
Nice Man. ignore those jerks that made fun it was really good I couldn’t believe it when i saw that you are 11. Standard rhyme scheme but really funny. You should definitely take a poetry class if possible.
( for 11) that could be turned as a rap)
I ‘m 11 to and that poem is awsom!!!!!!!!!!
That’s a rather good poem. I liked it. Paintball is pretty weird in itself, and it certainly would never occur to me to write a poem about it.
it was good keep it up
luv it
it not that good
Great job lil man & don’t listen 2 the LAMES who talk crap.
awsome job, im 30 and im into paintball, and thats the way it goes. dont let anyone tell you how or the way to feel, you are your self…. dont mind the crap that other people say, its there oppion
thats very good for an 11 year old. your very good!!!! round of applause!!!!!!!