Paintball

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I feel the shots taken
all the paint wasted
all the money spent
the dodging continues
you see people get hit.

The bruises and bumps you get
when the paint splatters
nothing really matters
you feel trapped
whats going through your head?

you see snipers with scopes
are you gonna get hit
might as well go prone
duck in the snake pits
but you get hit in the leg

its only you alone
verse 6 guys
what do you do?
you just sit and watch until they come
what do you know, you shoot a guy..

This is my first poem so please dont make fun of me im only 11
by Brandon Jakob

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31 Responses to “Paintball”

  1. cj, Said:

    nice

  2. Jackie, Said:

    fOR ONLY 11 THATS IS REALLY GOOD GREAT JOB bRADON nO WON SHOULD MAKE FUN OF YOU

  3. austin, Said:

    haha dumb

  4. Logan, Said:

    great poem! if u want a place to work on look at the part where it say7s u get shot in the leg….it doesnt flow with the whole thing…so if u change that than it will b fantastic :)

  5. someone you dont know, Said:

    haha the end is perty funny. it just like “what do you know, you shoot a guy” haha

  6. brandi, Said:

    cool poem !

  7. Mary, Said:

    omg thats really good fabulous job!!!!!!!!!!!1

  8. kelsey, Said:

    nice for 11 thats pretty darn good !

  9. Miles, Said:

    Hey man great poem! I’m into paintball and the poem describes really what it is all about. Great job!!!!!

  10. allie, Said:

    i love the poem and showed it to my english teacher and he even used it as a lesson in class one day… great job brandon!!!!

  11. Micheal Jackson, Said:

    Nice, if you are a boy can you come to my house at 10 p.m.

  12. THE STEVO, Said:

    cool poem keep it up

  13. Nightfox, Said:

    Nice thats better than me and im 16 :D

  14. cody, Said:

    nice job you did really good for a 11 year old

  15. umm cant say, Said:

    aww thats like so cute haha lmao lol dang

  16. drunkman #1, Said:

    austin stop being mean! NICE POEM KEEP IT UP!!!!

  17. paintball is my sport, Said:

    good poems

  18. jijmzg, Said:

    thats really good great job

  19. paintball 101, Said:

    Awesome Job

  20. paintball 101, Said:

    I hope its ok i am going to use your poem in my english project.

  21. Britney, Said:

    its really funny that your name is brandon and u wrote about paintball :D my cuzins name is brandon and hes the only person i ever paintball with!!! ur poem was really cute and embodied the essence of paintball beautifully!!!!

  22. Jorge aguilar, Said:

    dont listen to austin becuse that is a cool poem keep going

  23. joey, Said:

    Nice Man. ignore those jerks that made fun it was really good I couldn’t believe it when i saw that you are 11. Standard rhyme scheme but really funny. You should definitely take a poetry class if possible.

  24. destiny henderson, Said:

    ( for 11) that could be turned as a rap)
    I ‘m 11 to and that poem is awsom!!!!!!!!!!

  25. Charlotte, Said:

    That’s a rather good poem. I liked it. Paintball is pretty weird in itself, and it certainly would never occur to me to write a poem about it.

  26. billy the goat, Said:

    it was good keep it up

  27. akanksha, Said:

    luv it

  28. james, Said:

    it not that good

  29. jewels, Said:

    Great job lil man & don’t listen 2 the LAMES who talk crap.

  30. no 1 cares, Said:

    awsome job, im 30 and im into paintball, and thats the way it goes. dont let anyone tell you how or the way to feel, you are your self…. dont mind the crap that other people say, its there oppion

  31. teddy, Said:

    thats very good for an 11 year old. your very good!!!! round of applause!!!!!!!

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